Some subtle changes. The ending is different. I extended his viola playing so the ending isn't as abrupt and I edited out the bit about him going to the dentist because it wasn't necessary.
I think the edits you've done between drafts are really artful. As you continue with the piece (if you plan on continuing) I think that there are a few places where the sound of the viola overwhelms his voice and maybe the levels could be brought down. Other than that, this is one of the favorite audio portraits I've heard.
I really enjoyed listening to this. I love how we can feel the relationship between him and his violin. And I really liked how you incorporated him playing the violin, it gives us a great visual.
Hannah,
ReplyDeleteI think the edits you've done between drafts are really artful. As you continue with the piece (if you plan on continuing) I think that there are a few places where the sound of the viola overwhelms his voice and maybe the levels could be brought down. Other than that, this is one of the favorite audio portraits I've heard.
I really enjoyed listening to this. I love how we can feel the relationship between him and his violin. And I really liked how you incorporated him playing the violin, it gives us a great visual.
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