On the Road. The Final Draft. Or The Closest I've Gotten.

So I've been over and over this. I put sounds and effects in to add to the narrative and then I take them out because I don't like them or how I'm using them. And I take parts of the story out and then put them back in. I think I have spent too much time on this over the last two days and what with being sick which you might be able to tell by the sound of my voice (froggy croak) at this point in time my head is just full of fuzz. This is what I have. Let me know what you think. Thanks, friends.