This is my friend, Will's story about a trip with his sister. It still needs to be edited quite a bit because it is fairly long but if you are interested please feel free to take a listen.
So I found this story to be interesting in content. I think the storyteller did a good job of providing context for listeners to imagine, and provided sufficient detail to make visualizing the struggles easy. To jazz up the piece, think about adding music reminiscent of the local where the story takes place, sound effects for landscapes, or noises for the things he does. But really, if you slice this down a little, I know I'd love it even more. If I had to endure what he did through the turmoil filled trip, I don't know that I'd have made it. For one, throwing up is something i hate, so I quickly sympathized with him. Then the quirky details about how his sister attracted practically every suitor was amusing, since in the United States that doesn't usually happen. Lastly, I loved the bit about the camel. Props on the piece, hope you work with it more.
So I found this story to be interesting in content. I think the storyteller did a good job of providing context for listeners to imagine, and provided sufficient detail to make visualizing the struggles easy. To jazz up the piece, think about adding music reminiscent of the local where the story takes place, sound effects for landscapes, or noises for the things he does. But really, if you slice this down a little, I know I'd love it even more. If I had to endure what he did through the turmoil filled trip, I don't know that I'd have made it. For one, throwing up is something i hate, so I quickly sympathized with him. Then the quirky details about how his sister attracted practically every suitor was amusing, since in the United States that doesn't usually happen. Lastly, I loved the bit about the camel. Props on the piece, hope you work with it more.
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